Introducing
yourself well sets the stage for a professional conversation, whether that’s at
a networking event, with a colleague or at the beginning of an interview. One
tool many people use to make introductions simple and effective is the elevator
pitch.
1.
Use the following links to learn how to
create and deliver your elevator pitch:
Tips & example: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lb0Yz_5ZYzI
2.
Record and post your own elevator pitch.
3. Watch your classmates’ speeches and make
constructive comments. Have the guidelines been followed? What are the main strengths
of each elevator speech? Write at least one strength and one weakness for each
elevator pitch. How could they be improved? Provide feedback in relation
to the following assessment criteria:
-Linguistic use:
grammar/vocabulary accuracy, range and adequacy.
-Task
achievement: efficient achievement of communicative purpose, content
relevance and extent
-Fluency and
pronunciation: speech flow, intonation, stress and rhythm.
-Communicative
resources: use of linguistic and non-linguistic resources, support materials
and attitude.
22 comentarios:
Elevator pitch 1:
- Join to your company (not TO)
Elevator pitch 2:
- Good attitude & fluency
Elevator pitch 3:
- Put in contact (?) - "Keep in touch"
First elevator pitch:
Pros:
-Good pronunciation
Cons:
-It needs to be more fluid, with more connectors
- It needs to be more formal (speech, clothes)
Second elevator pitch:
Pros:
- It's very fluid
Cons:
- It could be more formal
Third elevator pitch:
Pros:
- It's friendly
Cons:
- It needs to be more fluid
Elevator pitch
First: Good explanation of the topic but it would have been better if he had emphasized the words and with a more pronounced intonation.
Second: A very good body langauge and prununciation, maybe too long. not FROM-> TO
Third: Grammatically speaking, needs to improve, maybe spoke too quickly. It's friendly
about the first video,
I think that the elevator speech of Roger has an appropriate structure and he has a good fluency. I will just add a sentence between the end of his own up data about himself and the farewell. Also I think he could improve his English pronunciation.
The next video of Laura is very nice. She has much more grammar and it is more suitable. About the structure I didn't see anything wrong. she has a positive face expression and nice sound.
And the last video of Sigrid,
she seems so exciting at the beginning of her introduction and also at the end, but she has a good fluency and grammar.
Elevator Pitch 1 :
Even if the presentation is very short, there is a good structure of the elevator pitch, starting with introducing himself and then showing his interest to the company.
However, there is some grammatical mistakes, for example saying "I am searching for " instead of " I am looking for".
Also, the word "fan" used is informal and could be replaced by the verb "admire".
Elevator pitch 2 :
This presentation shows a lot of enthusiasm, it shows that she really wants the job.
However, the rythm of the speech is a little bit fast , which can lead to confusion .
Elevator pitch 3 :
By specifying exactly the period when she wants to work in the hotel, she shows that she is ready to start.
Elevator pitch 1:
Pros: Good structure, body language & self-confidence
Cons: Pronunciation (e.g. tourism) & some grammar problems (e.g. not "a fan of you" but "a fan of yours", not "in this summer" but "this summer", not "I would like to know how could I join to your company" but "I would like to know how I could join your company")
Elevator pitch 2:
Pros: Very expressive & communicative, good pronunciation & fluency
Cons: Not "close from you" but "close to you", not "who I can contact to" but "who I can contact"
Elevator pitch 3:
Pros: Good pronunciation & enthusiasm
Cons: A bit too fast at the beginning & misuse of "contact" (e.g. not "contact with you" but "contact you", not "I'm gonna put in contact with her" but "I'm going to contact her")
Elevator 1: the speaker has been clear and direct. I would say "join your company" instead of "join TO your company".
Elevator 2: I've liked the way the speaker has done it. The speaker knows how to draw the attention by the way he or she speaks. The speaker could speak slowly and "The university is close to you and not from you".
Elvator 3: I've liked the way the speaker has expressed the information. The pronunciation has been very good. I think you "do not put in contact", you "get in touch"
Elevator 4: I've liked the way she has expressed her ideas. She has been concrete and very clear.
Elevator pitch 4:
positive: enthusiasm, positive face expression.
negative: too much movement with her hands
Elevator pitch 5:
positive: I can understand perfectly what she say, nice sound.
negative: Structure isn't so clear
Elevator pitch 6:
positive: Nice face expression and pronunciation
negative: She could try speak a little bit faster
Elevator pitch 4:
Cons: too many information. To meeting you--> to meet you
Pros: Very friendly, has good prununciation.
Elevator pitch 5:
Pros: She is fluent in english.
Cons: It wasnn't exactly an elevator pitch.
Elevator pitch 6:
Pros: fluent and good pronunciation.
Cons: Maybe grammar could be improved and don't speak that slow.
Elevator pitch 7:
Pros; Very interesting information and fluency.
Cons: Grammar and pronunciation could be improved
Elevator pitch 4:
Pros: Fluency, good structure, intonation.
Cons: The pronunciation in some words.
Elevator pitch 5:
Pros: fluency.
Cons: no intonation, pronunciation, low enthusiasm.
Elevator pitch 6:
Pros: clear and pronunciation.
Cons: some grammar problems, talking a bit too slow.
Elevator pitch 7:
Pros: expressive, intonation.
Cons: pronunciation, grammar, fluency.
Elevator 5: She has a very good pronunciation
She speaks low and she has not given too much information.
Elevator 6: She has expressed her ideas very good and has a very good pronunciation.
Elevator 7: you are fascinated by something and not with something. She has expressed her ideas very good. Good body language.
Elevator pitch 1:
Pros: Good pronunciation & fluency
Cons: too much movement
Elevator pitch 2:
Pros: Good structure and fluency
Cons: Not very expressive/enthusiasm
Elevator pitch 3:
Pros:Clear ideas and good structure
Cons:She could be more fluent, speak a bit faster
Elevator pitch 4:
Pros: positive and good pronunciation
Cons: she looks not confident at all, needs to be more fluent
Elevator pitch 4:
Pros: Good self-confidence & well structured.
Elevator Pitch 5:
Pros:She has a good pronunciation.
Cons: Not many information.
Elevator pitch 6:
Pros: She gives many information about her & good pronunciation.
Elevator pitch 7:
Pros:She gives many information
Cons:Maybe more fluency
Elevator Pitch 4:
Pros: good intonation and body language. She looks like she is really looking forward to get the job.
Cons: "contact with" is not correct
Elevator pitch 5:
Pros: good comunication
Cons: a bit slow and she is not very enthusiastic about the job
Elevator Pitch 6:
Pros: clear explanation of who she is and shat she wants. Also, she seemed very enthusiastic.
Cons: a bit too slow and monotonous intonation.
Elevator Pitch 7:
Pros: she looks really confident and she sounds convincing.
Cons: it looks a bit like if she is overacting.
elevator pitch 7:
positive: nice sound and enthusiasm, the structure is also good.
negative: the pronunciation of some words are not really clear.
4th elevator pitch:
Pros: -Formal
-Fluid
Cons: -She talks a bit fast.
5th elevator pitch:
Pros: -Good grammar
Cons: -It's not an elevator pitch at
all
-She could improve the
pronunciation
- It was an slow rhythm
6th elevator pitch:
Pros: -Good pronunciation
Cons: -She uses a lot of connectors, this, makes the presesntation slower.
-It can be more formal.
7th elevator pitch:
Pros: -Enthusiastic
Cons: -It needs to be more formal
-It could be more fluid
Elevator 5: Good body language but a bit quick when she was talking.
Elevator 6: Emphasies the language skills. I think the rythm of the speech is a bit slow.
Elevator 7: Really good pronunciation and very fluent, friendly. Any body language. It's good that she explain some experience in tourism sector.
Elevator 8: Enthusiasm and good structure but maybe too long for a elevator pitch.
Elevator pitch 4:
Pros: Very expressive & fluent. Projects a good image as a candidate.
Cons: Not "I was living abroad" but "I lived abroad". "Who I can contact" (without "with"). Not "It was so great to meeting you" but "Meeting you was great"
Elevator pitch 5:
Pros: Good pronunciation, word linking & fluency. Very accurate.
Cons: A pause is needed after "I speak four languages fluently". Not "my demand" but "my application" or "my request"
Elevator pitch 6:
Pros: Very expressive, manages to give the impression that she's really motivated. Good pronunciation and fluency.
Cons: Waving your hand for greeting at the beginning & at the end may seem a bit childish. Wrong sentences: "I've informed a lot about your travel agency and I think it's the better place for someone who is a lover of tourism for working", "I would love to keep in touch with you and you to know more about me". The correct sentences could be: "I've searched for in-depth information on your travel agency and I think it's the best workplace for someone who loves tourism", "I would love to keep in touch with you and I would like to encourage you to know more about me".
Elevator pitch 7:
Pros: Great expressiveness & excellent intonation.
Cons: A bit hesitating. Language problems: "sales assistant" instead of "sale assistant", "I am fascinated" instead of "I fascinated", "I would like to apply for this post/job" instead of "I would like to apply for this company", "I've been working in other places" instead of "I've been working in another places", "I hope to contact you" instead of "I hope in get in contact with you", and the pronunciation of "hotel", which is stressed in the second syllable.
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